Error Patterns #11

            I pattern of error that I have notice throughout my writing is that I tend to be repetitive in my ideas and I keep talking about the same thing through all the body paragraphs, which makes my writing boring. In order to improve and get rid of this problem I believe that the best thing to do is to be most focused when writing so I can prevent repetition. I know for sure that if I keep doing it I won’t be able to keep readers entertained because they are going to notice that I’m just talking about the same thing over and over.

            The other error that I commit often while writing is that I tend to get off of topic and then that makes the paper confusing and hard for the reader to understand the point I’m trying to convey. Therefore, in my future papers I’m going to focus in the style paper I’m supposed to do and not change the topic. For example for our first essay for class we were supposed write a Personal narrative and I got out of focus and started talking about other people and not me which you are not suppose to do because it’s a paper talking about your personal experience.

            The last thing I want to mention is the error that I commit in all my papers is that I don’t look for the right words to make it a high level and well written paper. I know that in order to fix this problem you have to do it with learning and enriching your vocabulary. Since, I have only studied English for 4 years, my vocabulary is not good that’s why I’m not able to do a good job in changing the words to make a college level paper. 

Peer Review #10

           In this class I learned that in peer review you obtain more ideas in how to write your papers and also how to organize your ideas. In our peer review we get into small groups in which we all read our paper and our peers would give us feedback. This peer review is effective because we are able to get opinion from other people. I believe that it can be improved by talking more about it with the class as a whole. That way we will have an idea in how to make our papers better.

            My weakness in peer review is that I get shy when reading my own paper and also I feel uncomfortable when I’m in front of others and they are reading my paper. My strength in peer review is that I’m able to give real good ideas to my peers that they can add to their papers to make more complete. I believe that peer review is the best thing to do when writing papers because at that early step you are able to see your weak points and have the chance to change that before the final paper. For me is better to do it in big groups because we are able to get more ideas.

            I think that we should keep the peer reviews as we have been doing in class because it helps everyone to write our papers. Peer review should be done for every paper because nobody writes perfect papers and everyone needs feedback from others in orders to make good papers.

Choice in Topics #9

           Of the three assignments that we have seen so far, in my opinion the hardest one was the Advertisement Analysis. The Advertisement analysis I found it hard because sometimes its tricks you in what the real meaning of the ad is. The easiest to write about was the literacy narrative because you write about personal experiences and the ideas come automatically.

            Anyways, it doesn’t matter how hard or easy they were all of them helped me to write better and that’s why I’m in this class. In this class am learning how to write in different styles and keep the writing on topic. I feel like I’m learning and also learning a lot by reading my peer’s papers. This class is also helping me to enrich my vocabulary and to understand things that I didn’t know. For example I have learned what does logos, pathos and ethos stand for.

            So, for the rest of this semester I am going to try to learn as much as I can in writing other styles. I know that this is going to be possible by putting all the effort possible from me and also by working together with the class and listening to their opinions and of course by listening to Ms.Spencer. This is the best class that I have taken so far in college because everybody gets along with each other and always willing to help. We have a class in which everybody give ideas about the topics we are analyzing that can be very helpful in order to write good papers.

Arguments (Don’t Presume to Know a Pig’s Mind)

During the Grammys Awards an ad for Chipotle Mexican Grill made its debut, in which a family of farmers raises their cows and pigs naturally and the animal seem to live happy.  Then, industries appear in the ad and they move the animals to indoors into large building, where the animals have no freedom and are all bunched up. After, the ad shows the farmer thinking about his animals and the things that industries do to the animals by giving them antibiotics and pumped the animals up. The pigs and cows are being oppressed and after they are big and fat they are processed into cubes of meat.

            The production methods are not supposed to cause pain to animals and we know that not only because they live outdoors, they are happy. However, this ad had a big impact, starting with McDonalds that started a campaign in which they ask suppliers to stop making suffer the animals used for meat. They said that they should look for other ways in which animal don’t suffer as much, as they do in gestation crates.

            The result of this change will be to push off the market all the small farmers raising hogs, because they are not going to be able to make changes in how the raise their animals. This meaning that the price of bacon will increase and the only suppliers will be rich industries.

            “Farmers are business people and respond to market signals” (B.Hurst). These are contradictory because while the worldwide hunger is high they keep arguing about how food is produced. Farmers will have to decide if they are going to keep producing meat the easy way or they are going to care about the nostalgia produced by how they treat animals....

             I chose this argument because is arguable and you are able to get a position. In this article especially you are able to against or for the use of medication to make animal bigger in shorter time periods. Also I decided to write about this because there is much info to write about this topic. You are able to talk about the protection of animals, Hunger worldwide, Use of medication in animals etc...