Revisions #14

            For my portfolio I’m going to revise the argument analysis. My strongest in this essay was that I successfully talked about how the author failed to make his argument and how the tone used was not trustworthy. The weaknesses were my organization and not having a clear thesis statement to tell the purpose of the essay. I will make sure that I address both strengths and weaknesses in order to have a well-written essay.

            In order to make good revision I will focus in organization of my paper and make sure that I have a stated thesis stamen and also having it in the right place. The organization and thesis statement have to go together because organization is how the paper flows and it has to be connected with the statement of purpose. This will help in order to have a good essay and also they are the most important things to make an effective essay, since the thesis is what tells the reader what the essay is going to be about and also the organization is not to lose the reader so they both have to be well connected.

            Also I’m going to make sure that every claim is connected to my main idea and not losing focus.  Other thing I’m going to be careful about is that I have to be careful of not mixing my claims so that my organization is clear and in the right order to make sense to the audience. I have to make sure that my thoughts are clear and that they are understandable for all the audience. 

Reflection #13

When I analyzed the article: don’t presume to know a pigs mind for the first time I thought that all the authors evidence was compelling. After, reading the article several times I realized that the author had weak points in his essay. He fails in his essay by not addressing the problem which is animal cruelty and rights. Ther3efore, I learned that even when you know is hard to address the other side, you have to talk about it in one way or another but you have to give solutions to the reader that why they are reading it.

Another thing that I learned in analyzing text is that you have to know who your audience is to create a common ground and have an idea how to approach them.  Otherwise people will not agree with you and you will lose readers right away. In my third essay I saw that Hurst fails to address the right audience because he is not solving the problem and people will get upset with the author because he wasn’t giving solutions. So, I learned that I have to give some sort of solution to the problem

The other thing you have to see when writing an argument is that you need a trustworthy tone and introduce that tone to your audience so everything you say the audience will believe it if you have the right tone.  In order to do this you will need to identify the rhetorical situation and of course use the right words to make the audience believe what you are saying.

Thnking about evidence #12

           The most compelling evidence in my argument is that all youngsters that are 18 or older should vote and be more enrolled in politics because those decisions affect their lives in one way or another. This evidence is real strong because if youngsters are enrolled in choosing a president, they can ask the candidates to help them more with their education or personal difficulties. By reading these ideas youngsters may realize that is for their own to participate in candidate elections to fight for their own ideals. Since this is one of my strongest points I will think about this claim when creating my thesis to refer back to it throughout the essay.

            My weakest point by making this argument that youngsters of 18 of age or older should vote in order to get what they want from government. The counterargument from them is that teens or young people are not relevant to government and they may say that their vote doesn’t make a difference toward the election. My explanation to this argument would be that youngsters need to be more enrolled in politics in order to have more opportunities and also to be addressed by the candidates. I will talk about why is so important for them to vote, even though their single vote will not count for much the community of teens as a whole does count and will make a difference because they are going to be the future of the country. They will make the change and therefore they should be enrolled in politics since they are 18 and being able to vote.